Blog #8: How is Your Paper Shaping up so Far? Second Draft Planning

I feel like my paper has a good base that I can further develop to fit my thesis. During the group reviews, my group members gave me good feedback that will help direct my second draft. They said I have a good introduction that was informative, and gave me suggestions to explain my quotes in more depth. For my second draft I know I have a lot to do in order to shape a good paper with a problem and solution. My thesis is: The problem is that society is relying only on social media to show case police officer’s imperfections, which is potentially effecting people from pursuing a criminal justice degree out of fear for their lives. Personally, I think my paper is filled with information about police officers stressful job, but I don’t talk about how it effects people from pursuing a criminal justice degree. Thanks to the help of my fellow classmates and other, I know what I have to fix going forth in my second draft.